I' desesperate i need help

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I had like very bad luck with betas, because until now, a friend here and a friend there help me out in the past, i loved my friends, they love me, but they have a lot to do writing and living so i have a lot of things who need check and the most terrible thing is in the now
I had like less than 10 days for posting my K/S advent calendar is almost finished and is like 9600 words now, and will end up like 11k giving or take. it is a cross over with Dune of Frank Herbert, but you don't need to read the book only with wiki about the bene gesserit is enough.

and hopefully a more permanent beta for my work in my computer and in my head.

more under the cut


Title: The Soltice of the young
Your Name / Username: ariadnechan
Verse: XI, TOS.
Characters and/or Pairing: K/S, Pike, Stonn, ocs
Rating: R and maybe nc-17 (violence, slavery, double agents, drugs(melange), Vulcan warriors with emotions, bene gesserit evilness, maybe explicit sexual content, or very clear implications of it in the r territory, some ponfarr).
Category: Slash.
Disclaimer: "I do not own the characters nor Star trek of frank Herbert Dune, and I am not making money by writing about them."
Author's Notes: for the prompt:
"Vulcan winter's solstice holiday, Sarek gives Spock in presurak (or baned surak religion) Jim as his personal slave as a gift. He is not amused". (i interpreted both of them were not amused at the beginning) This start with the holiday, but like is it is not xmas this turn out like two young beings becoming men owning their place in their respective society and falling in love, with evil earth empire and bene gesserit having Jim as a double agent. poor jim had forget a lot about that.

More notes:

the problems I'm not native, i'm spanish speaker, so my grammar and spelling, specially my times are laking. i'm a old in the fandom but i was the only one k/ser in my country until the new movie and Internet, so i find out about everything the same way all the new girls did but knowing tos and the movies by hard.

so i need a kind beta, not a nazi one, please, i always left unfinished the things when i get a nazi, because i'm not stupid, or ill instructed, i'm well instructed in other language. I hope for someone who can help me with the flow too, in english is very different, and give me ideas, if you want to it is always awesome, cheer leading is a plus, but not a necessity


HELP!!!! *bat eyelashes*